Topic: Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
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Many people decided buying some types of merchandises based on the advertisements they saw on television or newspapers. Personally, I accept the fact that advertising is one of the most effective way by which enterprises can introduce their products to potential consumes, however, I also agree that advertisement might annoy some viewer in several particular situations.
On the one hand, production companies can acquire many opportunities to promte widely the information and quality of their products through advertisements. Visual effects attrack viewer’s attention easier than the words providing boring details, result in bigger concern is spended for merchandies showed. Beside that, it’s true that people usually don not have enough time and abilities to research all the product’s information themselves direct, so advertisement becomes the famous choice to solve their problem. It’s easy for you to recognize some brand using advertisement tool effectively, such as CocaCola, KFC and LG.
On the other hand, the appearance of advertisement at several circumstances makes a part of resident feel like they are a joke or being disturbed. For example, enterpries often apply visual effects to introduce their products, which sometimes brings viewer’s inmagine images across the real quality of merchandises given. As a result, consumers are disapointed and further more, they might stop spending their faith for production companies. In addition, I’m sure that you will not being happy if there are unexpected advertisements appear while you are watching your favourite programs, don’t you?
In conclusion, the development of advertisement accompanies to the society’s, and we can not deny their benefits, however, production companies and merchandises should put reasonable advertisement using into consideration in order to raise their effect as much as possible.
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