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      2 bài viết cùng nội dung ở 2 band điểm 6.0 và 8.5 với chủ đề Education purpose

      12/07/2017 08:54
      Giáo viên Egroup đã đưa đến 2 bài viết ielts writing task 2 ở 2 band điểm khác nhau, hãy cùng so sánh và đưa ra nhận xét nhé

      Topic: Some people think the main purpose of education is to make individuals useful to society; others say education helps them to achieve personal ambitions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

      Bài viết band 6.0, 240 words

      There has been many debates that discuss about Education goal among scholars over centuries.

      A majority of people supports the idea that Eduction should be a tool for people to achieve their personal goals. In fact, many members in Upper class are purpose driven people. They was taught in their early life that personal ambitions should be in priority. Hence, having benefit from their personal goal driven background education, they are likely to achieve many successes in their profesional field and also in their later life goals. In short, the community of those successful people could form an advanced developed society

      On the other hand, Government advocate the view that Education should form useful individual for society. The authority tend to direct the citizen to pursue the goal of being useful for society instead of chasing their own ambition. This principle could create an effective scheme to develop society in short term. Everyone knows exactly what they are supposed to do, no one would ever cross the line. However, this system restrict the people’s truly happiness of living their dream. For example, a man can’t work as a charity worker if he doesn’t like the job. He can’t waste his life’s time to sacrifice for society’s development

      Although the development of society could only occur when all of individuals concentrate on society goals, the successful individual chasing their own ambitions could build outstanding development for society in long term

      Bài viết band 8.5, 245 words

      Education goal has existed over centuries to be rudimentary content of a significant number of debates among scholars, since the very first day human invented the early writing system.

      First and Foremost principle, which is wellknown as self development puspose to achieve personal ambitions, has been followed by a remarkable number of learners and educators. From evidence in the history of human evolution, the predominance of purpose driven individual in Upper class reveals the importance of personal goal driven education. In fact, the individual who has strong personal oriented education background could be likely to gain achievement in their professional field, followed by a greater success in their later life goals. Hence, The society in which many succesful citizens live is an advanced developed society as a huge impact from effective Education orientation

      On the other hand, nowadays, many authorities have been put many efforts to shape society oriented citizens, who is extremly cardinal for the development of society. This system could benefit a widely public in short term as the consequences of well-organized labor force to suit with the region goal. However, the resident could suffer from society oriented scheme as it forms barrier to restrict them living their own dream. For instance, a charity worker cant waste his life to fulfil the responsibility of the job which is not one of his favorites

      No sooner have the individual encouraged to pusue their own ambitons than the society witnesses outstanding development, which benefits from individual sucess

      Bài viết được biên soạn bởi Cô giáo Mai Ngọc Tú (overall 8.5 ielts)

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